Ororo Munroe

First, I am going to ask that you contact me via PM, Chatango, or AIM. Your choice, I just want to get to know you a bit.

Second, I am kind of at odds with your 1st person written style but came to terms with it... in part. I need you to re-write your sample post and powers section into third person. The first because I want all narrative posts in third person (take that to heart); the second is because it will work better ennumerated as third person.

Third, kind of a peeve but I am not sure I would call Ororo asexual, selective is more accurate

Fourth, I would like a bit more on the personality section, perhaps either a reaction to her powers (its mentioned often everywhere else in the bio actually that she is suspicious of her role in her family's death).

Fifth, eliminate the references to canon Storm, its unnecessary and actually weakens your first person style. It goes from being a personal synopsis to a 4th wall break, which isn't bad but it isn't Storm. (For instance, if someone RPed Squirrel Girl, I could see the bio working as written by Tippy-Toe, doing that). We can talk about that when you get in touch with me though.

That is all, I hope to hear from you.

--David